yeah this chapter had a lot of action so i felt a quick pace was better but yeah maybe slow it down a little in forthcoming chapters

as for the grammar...i re-read it and it sounded fine to me...so what do you mean speciically?

but i'm glad you like it overall i was worried the fight scene wouldn't go down too well cuz well, i don't know much about fighting

the next chapter will prolly be on fingar and junibar..don't want to neglect them